Nice, though a bit vague ... from an inspirational standpoint, but you really should use keywords explaining what your post is about in the subject ... as opposed to "Hey Guys!".

Way too generic ... will probably be passed on by as just another "I'm New and need Help!" intro post.

I also wouldn't promote mailing to individuals that haven't opted in to receive my messages, unless my offer had a mutual benefit (like a co promotion or JV offer) ... is that what you're alluding to?

Cheers,

Mike