Hello Sarah,

Welcome to JVNP board..I looked a your sales copy. Her are some of my comments -

1. Adding your signature atthe bottom of sales letter is nice
2. The way you have mentioned the details of your videos is good.
3. The 1st headline is nice.
4. It looks like there are more than necessary headlines on your 1st page (Above the fold). You may want to remove 1 or 2 from there.
5. The amount of text in headline format in between the sales page is also high. You may want to change some of this text from headline to normal text.
6. Your sales page tells that what people will get. But it doesn't say why people should buy it and what are its advantages. There is very limited connection with the reader on the sales page.

These are just some of my comments. Please don't take it in negetive shade.

Thanks,
rahul