Hey Mark - I just joined the forum today, and read your post. I would be happy to take a look at your copy and offer some suggestions. I am a graduate of AWAI's Copywriting program, and while I don't usually write copy for others (I took the course to learn how to write my own sales copy), I'm sure I could lead you in the right direction. If you really need it written for you, we could look into something later on.