I honestly didnt work hard on this.

[Tony Shull]

Hey I couldnt think of a subject. The other day I recorded a 'impromptu improv" comedy song about wanting to make money online...however I played NEXT to a fan that just blares through out the 20 lovely minutes spread through 3 videos... and i also dont have the money to learn guitar so with that being said check it out and comment KINDLY :-\

My diabolical plan = some of you lovemy video presence and you pay me to make a similar video (with my shirt on) ... I'll record a new one soon but first I want to see how the crappy ones go.. and dont forget i dont really know how to play guitar so you aren't paying for talent lol your paying for a funny song video about marketing that you can send out to your list and get their attention. Anyway heres the video Hope you all like it I want to record some more.

Crank it up and ...get ready to ingore the annoying fan.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Gu80243U4Cw

-OZ

[KevinRiley]

WARNING: I hope you are ready for brutal honesty and have a thick skin. If not, I would stop reading right now.

I never made it to the song. Between the annoying fan and your rambling on, there was absolutely nothing to engage me. I had to force myself to stay the first few seconds. What you must remember, if you want to create video that people will actually watch - and that anyone would pay you for - is that you are shooting it or them, not you. Always keep your audience in mind and consider how they are going to take your video. They are not your family or friends, who may find your video funny because they know you. They are people with a selection of billions of videos in front of them, so why should they stay and watch yours?

Are you still with me? If so, congratulations and I hope you take this as the constructive criticism it is meant to be.

[Laurie Rogers]

Okay here comes the brutal honesty, I think I may have stayed a few seconds longer than he did, but not much longer. Asking for marketing advice isn't always nice and you've got to take it how it's mean't to be, to HELP YOU in the long run.

Put your shirt on, there's nothing worse than seeing someone half naked in a video, trying to talk to ME about making money, I know how to make money, so why do I need you?

Are you that broke that you can't afford a shirt? (that's what the video screams). And hey you're not The Rock, VinDiesel or even Stone Cold Steve Austin thus not making you "no shirt worthy". Big turn off from a ladies perspective.

If you knew the fan was going to be annoying why would you have it on? Makes no sense!

Your lighting sucks, you look like you're in some basement that is about to have the ceiling cave in.

You've got glasses on, a hat on and poor lighting, thus not giving your audience the ability to see your face (get rid of the hat, fix your hair). And since the majority of communication is done via body language, you've eliminated most of it with people's inability to see your facial expressions clearly.


That's about all I've got, because I couldn't watch it anymore.

P.S. if it makes you feel better, I once got reemed out by Terry Dean when he critiqued one of my sites a long time ago and it was WAY worse than this

[Dan B]

I don't really get how this is supposed to work to get you partners.. to make you money or anything really... I can't even really hear you and it is very bad quality... this seems to be your intention (!? why?) but it just got switched off straight away really..

[Rick_Thomas]

Sorry bro, but I cant even hear what ur saying. Try again with a better camera or turn the mic volume up or something.

[Garret Acott]

ehh, yeah, I'd give it another shot d00d.

Garret

[Damian Kitchen]

i was gonna watch the video but its been removed.

maybe a new and better one is on the way

[Gugulethu Mokwebo]

i was gonna watch the video but its been removed.

maybe a new and better one is on the way

lol maybe he didn't get the results he hoped for :-\ I was desperate to see it though

[Tony Shull]

exactly! a new (hopefully better one) will be on its way. Thanks for the comments tho. It was just meant to be something you could embed on a little optin or promo page (IF IT was audible) to your list and theyd be all laughing and wonder what you have thats different.

Sorry I didn't reply earlier I honestly didn't know I was getting replies. I was waiting for an email to say I recieved a reply...

I deleted it (all 4 of them) for the same reason noone watched it... The fan ;D Soon I will take another crack at it ....

Oh and to answer "why did you post it if you knew the fan was a problem" I was HOT and the song was freestyled so I just plain didnt want to do it again lol

I'll show the new one to youguys first but now i have to search through forums to find my posts and see if anyone replied to my others.

Thanks again guys and girls.