You have a great looking page Justin! Hope you make a tons of money with it!

I have a few suggestions related to grammar and word usage. I'm not being critical--just trying to help...

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The hell with all this chit chatter and rambling that takes you normally an hour and a half to read on most review pages.

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The hell with all this chit chat and rambling that normally takes an hour and a half to read on most review pages.

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This information is simple sweet and straight the point its easy to understandand it has made a substantial difference in my life and it will when you understand how easy and effortless this MassTrafficPPV system is.

Better: This information is simple, sweet, and straight the point. It's easy to understand and it has made a substantial difference in my life. I believe it will make a difference for you when you understand how easy and effortless the MassTrafficPPV system is.

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I don’t even consider this as work. Feels more like retirement if you ask me!

I love that phrase--it's great !

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Strap on your seat and prepare to be amazed.

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Strap yourself in and prepare to be amazed.

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Hey everyone this is Michael Lysingere most of my friends call me Mike for short. You can feel free to call me Mike as well. Let me just start off by saying that if you are looking for me as and internet guru or expect me to refer to myself in that manner then your in the wrong place. I don’t know about you but I am very skeptical of those who claim to be guru’s and like you probably have been I have been screwed over by many of them trying to get to the ” know how” so to say of internet marketing in its various forms. I am just a normal guy who has been through some really tough times and frustration through internet marketing. I have banged my head against a lot of walls and it has depressed me. Today at this present moment and time I can honestly say that banging my head against a wall called Mass ppv Traffic wa s a decision I would not live to regret. Also I am going to keep it short and to the point with this review.

Better: Hey everyone this is Michael Lysingere. Most of my friends call me Mike for short. Feel free to call me Mike as well. Let me just start off by saying that if you are looking at me as an Internet guru, or expect me to refer to myself in that manner, then you're mistaken. I don’t know about you but I am very skeptical of those who claim to be gurus.

I am just a normal guy who has been through some really tough times in Internet marketing. I have banged my head against a lot of walls and it has depressed me. But today I can honestly say that getting involved in Mass PPV Traffic was a decision I do not regret.

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These are my clickbank stats on a weight loss product created by Joel Marion. The guy who lost weight in 16 weeks you all might have seen him on CBS. Anyway these stats were a perfect representation of how badly I was getting my ass handed to me by clickbank and google adsense. I thought it was a goo product because of the content on his landing page such as video testimonials, written testimonials and international TV exposure of his weight lost program. It was a good product, but I was not applying google adsense correctly.

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These are my Clickbank stats on a weight loss product created by Joel Marion, the guy who lost weight in 16 weeks. You might have seen him on CBS. Anyway, these stats show of how badly I was getting spanked by Clickbank and Google AdSense. I thought it was a good product because of the content on his landing page: video testimonials, written testimonials and international TV exposure of his weight lost program. It was a good product, but I was not applying Google AdSense correctly.

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I would have thousands of people just clicking my sponsored google ads that I posted through adsense but non of them were converted into buyers. Now keep I this was around the time period were I had just dropped out of college and was looking at this as a quick means to gain a dollar rather than to learn the business itself. So at this point I am frustrated with my paid per click ads and my vain attempts to build an e-mail subscribers list to convince that my product was worth while. I started doing evaluations on my keyword research. One word. Booooorriing. Most of all agonizing. At this point in time in my life I had bought tons of book from these self proclaimed gurus and a bunch of gimmick magic bullet formulas that I wanted to believe would work for me.

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I would have thousands of people just clicking my sponsored Google ads that I posted through AdSense, but non of them were converted into buyers. This was around the time period when I just dropped out of college and was looking to this as a quick means to gain a dollar rather than to learn the business itself. At this point I was frustrated with my pay per click ad results. I started evaluating my keyword research. One one word: Booooorriing.

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I had nothing else to look forward to. It was either I would succeed at this or I would have to go back to my day job which I was basically on the verge of getting fired from as a result of having an over obnoxious boss and a hectic schedule that was hell to upkeep. I just kept on doing keyword experimentation after experimentation and it was like the more I tried to be clever with my longtail keyword composition the more money I lost biding on keywords that were not drawing any traffic to my sites. For those of us who have dealt with long tail keywords and bidding on keywords that are relevant we know that this is a very tricky thing to do and most of us rather not do it in the first place because it is too much headache even with the advance keyword software that they are putting together nowadays.

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I had nothing to look forward to. It was either I would succeed at this or I would have to go back to my day job. I just kept on doing keyword experimentation, but the more I tried to be clever with my long-tail keyword composition, the more money I lost biding on keywords that were not drawing any traffic to my sites. For those of us who have dealt with long tail keywords and bidding on keywords that are relevant, we know that this is a very tricky thing to do.

TIP: Try to break up your longer paragraphs into shorter ones. You need to keep your information in bite-sized pieces the reader can digest easliy.

I didn't go through the entire page--just a lot of the main text. Hope it helps a bit--good luck!

P.S. Justin, if you'd like, you can download a copy of my Concise Guide To Writing For Internet Marketers. It's free. No opt-in, no ads, no funny stuff. It might be helpful to you (or anyone else who wants a copy).

http://niche-control-marketing.com//wrtrs-guide.pdf

--Mike